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Radiance Reviews:
Reviewer:
Rei
Main
Page 6.5 out of 10
Likes: I’m so used to sites opening up as splash pages, but this one
appears not to have one. On the good side, your site really doesn’t need a
splash page. The layout for your site is very simple and has a decent look.
You introduced your site relatively well. I like how you have a separate
page for the updates, even though it is a bit hard to find updates for
certain sites. But you at least note the last update, so that’s all good.
Dislikes: I noticed a lot of grammar issues. Though you did introduce the
site and explained the purpose of it, your approach was rather childish.
Most of your sentences ending with several exclamation points, which isn’t
proper grammar. There are commas where there shouldn’t be as well. For
example, the line “I hope you like this site, and have fun looking
around!!” shouldn’t have the comma there. Well, it technically
shouldn’t have the extra exclamation point there either. Also, I noticed
that your disclaimer isn’t very well written. The purpose of having a
disclaimer is so that no one can steal your work. I mean, people still have
the ability to do that, but with a disclaimer, you are claiming you don’t
own any of Sailor Moon (so you don’t get sued) and that everything else is
basically yours. That way, your rights can be defended. Anyhow, I noticed
you have links to other sites on top. I believe one of them is your domain,
which is understandable, but the other two I don’t understand. If it has
nothing to do with your site, then why is it there? Also, why is your text
centered? I’m not a huge fan of centered text. Perhaps if you align it to
the left it would look better. I also see from your coding that you’re
using div layers. You can easily make the text seem more centered but also
have it aligned to the left.
About 4 out of 10
Likes: You have a different approach at showing who Seiya is, which is very
good. The stats aren’t shown first, which most shrines usually display
stats first, but this is your site, so you don’t have to follow those
ways. Your descriptions of Seiya’s personality are also very nice and give
the reader a good description of who Seiya is.
Dislikes: Though explain Seiya’s personality rather well, I felt like
there wasn’t enough information here. I didn’t even see any in depth
information on Sailor Star Fighter, like her attack and transformation.
Sure, all of this is rather simple, but it’s still a nice addition to the
rest of the information you have. I also like to note that Seiya, Yaten, and
Taiki are not brothers. I know that there are lots of rumors about them
being brothers and so forth, but in the end, they’re not. They’re just
disguising themselves as idols and looking for their princess. Of course
they’re going to stick together. And Seiya is his last name. I know it’s
a bit strange and odd; I didn’t understand it at first either. Another
example of this is Shoujo Kakumei Utena’s Saionji. Saionji is his last
name, though everyone calls him Saionji. When he does say his full name, he
says Saionji as his last name, both English and Japanese versions. Now, I
know that had nothing to do with Sailor Moon, but hopefully that explains
things a bit more. Plus in Naoko’s art books, she writes his name as Seiya
Kou. Is that not enough proof? You can’t just ignore that. Whatever Naoko
says or writes, basically goes. She is the author. For your love section,
even though it’s relatively good information, I’m sorry, but your
information on anime Seiya and Usagi was way too long. All you did was
summarize the entire series. I wasn’t impressed with that section. I
wasn’t very content with the manga section for love either. What proof do
you have that Seiya wasn’t in love with Usagi in the manga? Personally, I
believe that’s all opinion, for I believe Seiya was in love with Usagi in
the manga. On the voice actress section, wouldn’t it be nice to add a
little bit more information? Maybe even your own thoughts on her? Like, if
you thought she did well as Seiya or not. And last, for your last section, I
just think you need to get your information correct. Overall, I didn’t
like how your text was aligned. One minute it’s centered, the next it’s
aligned to the left side. When it’s aligned to the left side, it’s WAY
too close to the border. I’d recommend you to fix that so it looks better.
Multimedia 6.5 out of 10
Likes: A good amount of images. Plus you have thumbnails! Real thumbnails!
All of your images work except for the very last one, which comes up as a
404 error. That can be fixed, though. I also haven’t seen midi files on
sites in a while. This is a nice addition.
Dislikes: Your gallery of images is nice, though I don’t really think they
are organized nicely. Perhaps if you organized them like, the first couple
of bunches are anime Seiya, then anime Star Fighter, then manga images, and
so forth. That way, it’s more organized and people don’t have to click
from section to section to find certain images. Your lyrics to the songs are
nice, but what relation do they make with Seiya? If you wrote down why,
it’d probably all make sense. I’m rather disappointed that you only have
three wallpapers and they’re all 800x600. You can find wallpapers
practically anywhere. Sure, they’re probably not yours, but you can give
credit to them. As for your music section, I don’t really get why you have
Cosmos’ theme and Galaxia’s theme. What close connection do they have
with Seiya? I’d recommend keeping Seiya related music up here.
Interactive wasn’t marked.
Site 7 out of 10
Likes: Everything here looks decent. It’s good to explain why you made
your site and that you have links to other Sailor Moon related sites. Also
glad to see you have thumbnails for your awards.
Dislikes: I didn’t understand the support section. Are these fanlistings?
Because that’s what they look like. Again, your approach on the “Why
Seiya?” section was rather childish. I really don’t think anyone’s
going to take you seriously if you have that kind of approach. You also have
very little links. There are so many Sailor Moon sites out there. You can
still link to them, even if they’re not Seiya related, in case people want
to find information on Sailor Moon in general and not Seiya. Overall,
there’s not that much in this section to review, so I really don’t have
that much to say.
Comments: To be honest, I wasn’t entirely impressed with your site. You
had some good parts, like your information on Seiya’s personality, and
some faults, like wrong information. Wish what you want to think about Seiya,
but in the end, your information is incorrect. It’d probably be to your
best interest to correct it as well. Your site also needs organization as
well, like with the alignment of your text. Overall, there really wasn’t
that much to see. A lot of it was your own opinion and not real facts. Your
overall child-like approach to your site wasn’t very appealing either. You
seem not to take your site seriously. Though you’re not a professional
site, if you have somewhat of a mature outlook, I’m positive people will
respect your site more. Your site still has a lot of time and room to grow
and progress, so I hope you use that all wisely.
Given: None
Mark: 6 out of 10 // 60%
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My
comments: Well. It's certainly honest, isn't it? I really appreciate that.
Hmmmm... I submitted this site in-between getting this site back online and
revamped, so a lot of the problems pointed out here have already been
addressed. I find that really encouraging, because that means I'm on the
right track! I need to point something out. I do NOT have bad grammar. *eye
twitch* Yes, I know that multiple exclamation points are to be avoided, and
I'm supposed to get my point across through descriptive language instead of
my punctuation. But this isn't an English paper I'm writing here, so I'm not
going to be that formal. I really pride myself on my grammar skills, so I
refuse to accept anyone saying my grammar is poor.
Again,
I didn't appreciate the in-depth complaint saying I'm wrong about the
brothers and names things. But I've set everything up better now, so I'll
let this go. Everything else in this review, I've fixed up. Thank you very
much, Rei, for helping me with my site! ^__^
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