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Yumemiru
Reviews:
Review #411 Happy Star
(08/02/03)
Owner: Razzy
Score: 64.5%
Dreampoints: 5.5
"Heavenly"
Reviewed by Aurora-hime and Amber-lin
First, Aurora-hime's review... Aurora wishes that it would rain
forever. Forever raining... yes.. please rain.
Layout/First Impression:
If you don't already know by now, I like simple layouts and yours is the
very definition of that. Plus, I like the color orange. However, you lose
points because of all the useless stuff you have on your main page that
shouldn't be there at all. This site is about SEIYA and SEIYA only. So your
banners for your other sites should NOT be on the main page because that is
distracting. Besides that, why do you put links here to sites that go
elsewhere? Do you really want us to leave this Seiya shrine? Take these out
and put them in the links section. You also do not need those four icons on
the bottom to go to other various shrines. What are you trying to do with
your main page? You don't plug your other sites here. This is a shrine to
Seiya... and your main page should be nothing but Seiya. Whatever you do,
don't make your visitors leave the page. But because of your various links
to other sites of yours it seems you want us to leave. OK, I'm repeating my
self.
Also, please align your text to the left. Don't center align your text
because it looks disorganized. That is one of my pet peeves.
About
I don't understand why on earth you write that Taiki and Yaten are Seiya's
brothers. Now, I haven't seen the anime in quite awhile but I don't think
they EVER mentioned that bit of information. Just remember that they have
the same FIRST name (Kou) and different last names. And if they are brothers
explain to me why they are in the same grade amd have different birthdays.
Fix up your information but I guess this will be explained to me later?
Otherwise, this is an actual OK profile. But the wrong information about the
guys being siblings just ruined it. When you were describing the
relationship of the Three Lights, you wrote this sentence... Seiya
and Taiki are usually exasperated together about Yaten's... about Yaten in
general. ... I have absolutely NO idea what the heck you are trying to
say.... A lot of your sentence structures here are odd. And there are a few
grammar errors here too. Please read this page over. However, I do
understand where you're getting at so I am not going to nitpick. Just please
fix that sentence. You may want to add that though Yaten has this
"Cold" attitude towards the girls in general... he does have this
special thing with Luna.
You seem to mix his name up. His name is Seiya Kou. He introduces himself in
the Japanese way. Family name first, given name last. As you can see, he is
Mr. Seiya! NOT Mr. Kou. You have seen the anime right? There's great
evidence there that the Lights ARE NOT brothers and that they have the
different last names. First, (I always use the same example) when Haruka and
Seiya first met each other when Haruka introduced herself as "Tenoh
Haruka" while Seiya introduced himself as "Seiya Kou" See?
Last name first, First name last. In another situation when Taiki and Makoto
were in a cooking show together... the chef called Makoto as
"Kino-san" He called Taiki "Taiki-san"...
There are a lot of white space in the Love Section take out all the
page breaks here after the "back" link. It seems you are recaping
just Seiya and Usagi episodes here. Put a little more opinion... after
awhile I got tired reading it. Why? Because I've seen these episodes already
and don't really need to read a summary of it. I mean, doing something like
what you have is fine... but it needs to be more personal. You have some
opinions here but you have to be biased here, you have to be opinionated
here, you have to make US, your visitors believe that Usagi and Seiya make a
better pair than Usagi and Mamoru and YOU HAVE to explain why that is so...
What you have here does NOT convince me that Seiya and Usagi should be
together. You need evidence and such... you just need more depth. As for Naoko's
comments You can at least PUT the actual image here. How can you put up
her descriptions/comments here when you are not even putting up the actual
image she is commenting on?
As for the Seiyuu information... please DO NOT center align these.
You can center align her list of voice acting credits but other than that
align everything to the left. Like I said, center aligning things that
shouldn't be center aligned is one of my petpeeves. I honestly wished you
had YOUR opinions of Niiyama Shiho here instead of the same old Doi
information as She was born on March 21, 1970, in Nara, Japan. She 5 foot
5, and worked at Aoni Production. First, do you really care about where
she had woked? Do you even know "Aoni Productions"? no... is that
information interesting? NO. You need opinions. Did you like Niiyama-san's
performance as Seiya? Did you like her singing voice as Seiya? Did you think
she did a great job trying to sound like a 16 year old boy? Tell me. That
information is much more interesting. It is however nice that you have
various links to sites that pay homage to her.
Were you wondering?
Ok, so you sort of defend yourself here... in whatever you are trying to
prove. But that fact of the matter is, your reasoning is wrong. Besides
that, I have three friends named Andrea. And they hang out together. How can
you think just because they have the same name that is absurd? You think my
friends having the same first name is absurd? But I guess believe in what
you believe in, but just remember to make your reasons clear, that is the
point I'm trying to make here. For every one of your reasons, I can totally
contradict you. Think of reasons where you know NO ONE can contradict you.
If you say that every translation has it "your" way... well show
me evidence. And the whole living together thing... the point you're making
is still wrong. They are 16 years old in a foreign country and in an idol
band. You think they will be living apart from each other especially when
they're only on "earth" for the sole purpose of finding Kakyuu? I
don't know about you but if two of my friends and I go to a foreign country
for the sole purpose of looking for another friend, I would NOT WANT to live
seperately from them. Though they are foreigners, they take on Japanese
identities so OF COURSE they will be using Japanese names. If you still plan
to defend yourself think of more probable reasons... because what you have
now makes me shake my head. Just because they look alike (which is what I
don't get because they don't look a like at all) does not make them
brothers. Maybe you have read it before, but please read what Kotetsu has
put up in her site about this issue... here..
Not only does she make and others who contribute, good points about this
issue... their facts are very valid and believable unlike yours. And unlike
you, they give proper evidence. If you are still contradicting, make up
better reasons. And being an REM fan for years, I know for a FACT that all
the members of REM lived together before they hit it big.
Multimedia
Woot! I like your thumbnails in the Gallery, but PLEASE make them all
open in a seperate window. It's much better that way so you don't have to
press the back button everytime you look at an image.
As for the Song Lyrics please put the singers for these, what episode
it played on, or if possible who wrote it. I know Takeuchi has written many
SM songs... If you do these things instead of just plain pasting it on here,
it will be much more personalized. And describe them... Is it a nice song? A
sweet song? I, myself, like Search for Your Love because all three seiyuu
sing it. Please also give credit to wherever you got these lyrics from.
Well, what can I say in the wallpaper section but the cliched words
of "Make More". Again, make these open in a new window. When
making wallpapers next time, try making it in 1024*728 first and then just
resize the images for an 800*600 screen... therefore, you will let many more
of your visitors put up your wallpaper on their desktop. I also have an
800*600 res. But it seems a lot of people have higher resolutions nowadays
so try to make bigger ones too.
As for the Music you may as well... rename it to Midis since that is
what they are... Titling it "music" seems off because I
automatically thought of MP3s instead of midis.
Site
In Why Seiya, please again align this page to the left don't center
align this. And what do you mean by this sentence? All three of them are
named Kou? Don't you people understand the Japanese language??? I don't
get it. What are you trying to say?
As for the awards yes, please let them open in a new window. As for
the links... DESCRIBE your links. Especially since most of your links
are Starlight Shrines too.
Content: 12/20You're doing great so far. I hope you keep adding more
opinions. You are one of the few that still believe that they are brothers
and that their last name is Kou... Keep on thinking of more valid reasons
though. Like I said, give EVIDENCE so I can see your point. Please also add
more of your opinions. I can already see that this is an opinionated site,
so I hope you keep on with it. And think about my suggestions to make that
possible. But there's so much more to add (see originality/creativity
grade).
Layout: 3/5 It's nice and simple and that is what I like. However, I
hate how you center align things. Maybe it's a quirk of mine but I hate to
see things in center alignment when it doesn't need to be.
First Impression: 2/5 All I can say is that though I do like the
layout because of it's simplicity, I don't like the fact that you made your
main page have links to your other sites. That is not necessary and that
should belong inside the "links" page instead.
Navigation: 4.5/5 It's perfect. But at least try to make your images
open to a new window.
Originality/Creativity 8/15 In a way your site is different because
at least you give more depth to a charater like Seiya.. and I can see that
you are an opinionated person which is what I like. However, you can do so
much more with Seiya. Why not make a fun page on how Seiya can make a good
husband or an article about who would win in a fight... Seiya or Fighter?
Expand more on Usagi/Seiya... like I said, CONVINCE me on why you think they
are a good couple. Why not do an article on Seiya vs. Mamoru... Anything...
be different. I know this page is still new so I hope you continue. Watch
out for grammar errors and spelling mistakes and strange sentences. Look
through your site again and read them out loud. Try to explain your various
points a little more clearly.
Dreampoints: 5/10
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[My Comments: These
are NOT my original comments, because I no longer saw a purpose for them. I
did NOT find this review fair or professional in the least, but I do not
wish to fight with these people. I just wish that Aurora-hime hadn't found
it necessary to incite her friends to publicly insult me in her blog because
I did not agree with this review.]
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And now for Amber-lin's review, who's going to Florida this Friday!
First Impression/Layout: Wow, i haven't been to a Sailor moon related
site for looong time. I never watched the Sailor StarS anime... i've only
read the manga... oh well. Your layout's good. Very nice and simple.You also
gave credit to Naoko Takeuchi.. all good. I almost skipped over the sub page
links.. you should make them stand out a little bit more.
About: All the bios and the information were really good. You really
wrote everything well and stuff. I liked the Three Lights article the best..
It was also good that you didn't mix in anime and manga (geez, a lot of
sailor moon sites in general seem to do that... ) Oh yeah, I think you
should make the pictures in every single page bigger. Especially the
Seiya+Usagi Anime one. The pictures are awfully small. But that was my
favorite page out of all of them. I laughed at the part where Michiru asked
Seiya to help her undress. Hahahaha. I never watched the anime version, but
I think I like the anime version of Seiya+Usagi's relationship in the anime
more than the manga. I also like the Other page (In the Love section.) My
only complaint in all of these pages is the pictures...
Multimedia: Some of the pictures in your image section weren't that
great...at least you gave credits. you sure had a lot too. I think you
should divide the sections up into anime and manga.. The wallpapers are
alright. You could add one with something from the manga instead of the
anime.
Interactive: Ehh.. there's nothing wrong here.I know this is a new
site, and you already have a lot to offer, but I've already seen all the
stuff before. You should offer something more interesting and original than
a "Seiya quiz" or something... something that hasn't been used in
other sites. Maybe a quiz like "Which version of Seiya are you?"
or something. The manga Seiya is totally different from the anime Seiya. Of
course, that's only a suggestion. There's lots of possibilities out there.
And it doesn't have to be just quizzes of course. AND PLEASE!! Don't put a
"You know when you love Seiya too much" thingies. I HATE those!!!
They're also waay too overused in a bunch of shrines-- not just Sailor moon
related ones!! ahhhhh.
Site: All your pages are fine.. In the link section, you should
describe what each site offers. That's it. ^^
Overall: You offered a lot of good information about Seiya. All your
pages looked really nice, and your site looks good overall. There was some
original content-- you had a lot of opinions and stuff. But the thing is,
you don't really offer something totally originial. I've already seen Midi
sections, and the same quizzes and wallpapers. Add something that's totally
thought up by you. But anyways you still did a nice job, and your site has a
lot of potential.
Content: 14/20 Well, there wasn't an abundant amount of content, but
you still had lotsa good information and opinions.
Layout: 4/5 I wasn't totally wowed by it but it was simple and nice.
First Impression: 4/5
. Navigation: 5/5 I almost went over your subpage links. I was half
asleep though, but you should still make them stick out more.
Originality: 8/15 A lot of info and stuff, but not something totally
spectacular.
Dreampoints: 6/10
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[My comments: Now this
one was MUCH more fair than the last one. Thank you for realizing that
it's still a NEW site, and I'm trying my best here. Just a note to
anyone that reads this... I am totally revamping my music section... I'm
going to add stuff other than midis. And I'm working on organizing my
images better. Anyways, this review was actually very helpful to
me, and I'll keep these things in mind while I'm doing the total revamp.
Which... will be uploaded whenever we can get peko-pekoNET to a better
server.]
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